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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #30 on: January 21, 2014, 05:54:43 PM »
Can't see anywhere to write creatively, so I'm co-opting your vehicle Colonel sir!


"Hey, I phoned a few times, she isn't there or not answering, and I'm definitely not leaving an answer phone message about this"
"She works late then takes her boy to football, I don't think she's working tomorrow, try her then"
"I think three times is enough, if she wants to call back that's fine, but that's enough hard work from me. Look when you speak to her, just tell her that I'm apologising for being a .......I don't want to swear. What's a clean word for it......idi-"
"Unreasonable?
"-ot. Hey there's no need to join in. I'm beating myself up here, there's no need to help with the kicking."
"But you have been unreasonable. All this time you've been ignoring her, stopping her from seeing the kids. She really misses them"
"Well that's really terrible, maybe I should apolog..... Oh hang on. I WAS apologising. It was such a great idea, I had it first."
"I've thought that for years..."
"Let me finish your sentence; "but you wouldn't have listened?"
"Yes exactly, smartarse"
"So now you think I'm listening you want to tell me I was wrong all this time. I can stop listening just as quickly again......I'm joking. I'm done with all that nonsense. Nothing has to come out of this apology, I'm not expecting to become best buddies from this distance, but at least I've done the right thing."
"Yes eventually."
"Yes eventually. Have you had satisfaction? Are there any other colourfully descriptive words that you've been saving up to tell me, once you could be sure you had a captive audience."
"You're not dying are you?"
"No. It's only this conversation that's killing me."
"So why now?"
"Why not now?"
 "That's evasive."
"and YOU are hard work."
"Thank you"
"I'm joking"
"You're hilarious"
"I like that word better. Can we settle on my main characteristic as being "hilarious"? Unreasonable, won't help me pick up girls."
"Really hilarious"
"Tell her I'm sorry OK"
"That's where you came in"
"and that's all I can say. Bye for now. Cya soon."
"Bye dear. Take care"
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I used to encourage everyone I knew to make art; I don't do that so much anymore. - Banksy

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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #31 on: January 21, 2014, 06:18:29 PM »
That's cool man go for it!  Also, interesting piece here, I hope there is more to come.   
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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #32 on: January 22, 2014, 02:39:42 AM »
Thanks. I have this thing that writing dialogue is the hardest element to it and the purest. I wouldn't consider I was writing properly at all unless the dialogue was right. Writing from inside a mundane conversation and making it readable.
I used to encourage everyone I knew to make art; I don't do that so much anymore. - Banksy

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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #33 on: August 04, 2014, 10:39:09 PM »
Preface of a tidal wave

The preface of all prefaces, with a beginning
That makes no sense, save to say that
Some sort of story about a fool's journey
Lies within the depths of these confusing
Musings about a fan and a singer coming together
In a circle of lyrical mythology, poetical insanity, and
The stark contrast between imagination and reality.

Circuit Engineered Destruction (1)

Breaking my distractions up with
Nostalgic musings of the long gone past.
Thinking about opening my wrists to see
If the circuits can be rewired for time travel.
Just to the time when I let my life unravel
To this un-parallel course that is far south
Of my dreams. I wish reality had seams
To tear away and sew out the bad things.
Were the sheets bleeding?
No, remember the sweat was beading
And you were freezing from the nightmare
Of the wasteland you actually share
With reality and subconscious.
Which blood vessel re-connected to a blood vein resets the dream reality closed circuit television one more chance?
Now I've made a mess and not sure
If the medics can replace the dynamics
I've restructured according to the book of Dianetics.
We'll all return to the alien planet in cargo jets
Where every fantasy is all you can get?
Wait your not L. Ron Hubbard, but more like
The devil incarnate with smiles that start with
My damnation from which I'll never receive pardon.
I've forgotten why I would try my hand at bio-vascular circuitry soldering surgery
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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #34 on: August 05, 2014, 01:34:13 AM »
Very concrete images.  A solid poem.
"It's not art unless it has the potential to be a disaster." Bansky

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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #35 on: August 05, 2014, 07:56:44 AM »
Thanks for reading Steve, appreciate the comments as well :)
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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #36 on: August 05, 2014, 08:06:41 AM »
Decision to Rescue Disaster (2)

Awakening into hospital light bliss,
The calming drugs nursing my sense
Of darkness and depravity into something
Sweetly enrapturing.
Could I change my philosophy?
No, because then I'd be addicted to chemical euphoria.
I need to link together my enjoyment of fantasy
And the reality which governs me.
Maybe, let's see-oh yes the cd of infamy,
That supposedly leads to some remarkably
Profound nirvana that could break my depressing mantra.
(Music starts) Oh that sound that lifts
My spirit, body, and soul from the ground.

And here comes mom to the rescue
I can smell her moth ball perfume
As she asks "Whats wrong with you?"
Nothing I can really pick and choose
To tell you as its all misunderstood
Nonsense I make believe as prophecy.
A new seed planted in my hand to grow a plant
That the whole world will understand and make
Everything in between seem that much more
Sad. Now the doctor speaks
As Peanut's parents, or Maynards
Vain attempt to make us realize
We're just monkey's deaf, dumb, and blind.
Doesn't really matter because I'm going to seek out Saturn
And make a home with the master who left the clues to a secret
I shall discern with a keen eye and ear that will
Make my sad little world clear.
Press eject, give me the tape, and I know what is good for you.
If we elect to take our shape, then woe will be true for you.
Its a give and take world that will present arms to you.
I shall avenge the rape done to our minds by the governors of swine.
I'll take my time and we shall dine on liver and red wine, just like Ced
Said in the storybook rhyme, 2nd album track 9 last line.
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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #37 on: August 05, 2014, 09:15:08 AM »
Profound nirvana that could break my depressing mantra.
(Music starts) Oh that sound that lifts
My spirit, body, and soul from the ground.


What music does that for you? Listing songs that lift so high, would make a great music thread. :)
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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #38 on: August 05, 2014, 10:05:52 AM »
Maybe this...

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Re: colonel_mexico's poem thread
« Reply #39 on: August 05, 2014, 12:41:43 PM »
Oh! That would do it! Makes me think of something oldkid said:

Sometimes you just have to Floyd.

:)


I remember really being transported by Dogs and the one you posted does the same things. Thanks for letting me see the poem better through a music example.
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