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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1040 on: April 08, 2019, 09:20:59 PM »
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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1041 on: September 28, 2019, 11:45:07 PM »
Did everybody already know it's "bury the lede" not "bury the lead"?

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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1042 on: September 29, 2019, 04:54:48 AM »
I do, but I was a journalism major for a hot minute.

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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1043 on: October 04, 2019, 05:42:50 PM »
Hi all, knowing how many writers we have around here, I'd love your feedback on this:

Which is a better?

Every day by my choices I write my story.

OR

Every day my choices write my story.
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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1044 on: October 04, 2019, 11:02:11 PM »
First one has some strange but acceptable grammar. Second one does have the agency problem a bit. If you're stuck with the every day phrasing, I'd stick with the first. If not, I'd go with something like "I write my story every day [with/by] my choices."
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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1045 on: October 05, 2019, 12:13:42 AM »
How about “Every day, by my choices, I write my story”?

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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1046 on: October 05, 2019, 12:43:39 AM »
I was using every day to signify that every choice matters, big or small, daily choices ... every one matters.

I think the second one is a little clumsy but I take your point that it shows more ownership or agency than the first one. Also the commas do give it more clarity.

I thought "Every day my choices write my story" was poetic but maybe not. I also got on a track substituting decisions for choices, but in the end decided choices seemed more moment to moment and urgent than decisions.

I'll think about it some more. Thank you for the feedback.

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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1047 on: October 05, 2019, 06:45:53 PM »
I took on board all you said and ended up with:

With every choice I write my story.

Thank you for the help!


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Re: Words and Grammar and Stuff
« Reply #1048 on: October 09, 2019, 03:14:30 PM »
Has anyone used Grammarly?  It is helpful or just a nuisance?
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